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The rules.
1. Entries must begin with the two words: Lightning flashed.
2. Entries must be 300 words or less and be in prose. I'm not versed enough in poetry verse to judge it properly.
3. Entries must be posted on your blog between May 21 - 23.
4. You must sign up in the linky below to have your entry be counted.
On May 25, I will announce the six finalists and open voting through May 28th.
My entry: 300 words exactly.
Don't Call Me Witch
Lightning flashed. I saw his face in the rigid outline of
the night sky. His eyes searching the field, I ran. I would be at a huge
disadvantage if he kept using tricks. Wizards, ha! Cheaters more like it. I
dashed into the forest. My heartbeat rushed gulping breaths from my lips. My
thighs burned with use, the muscles constricting as I willed them in place. If
he caught me, the competition would be over.
I probably shouldn’t have agreed to the contest in the first
place, but Gregory pissed me off. I mean really, just because he’s a wizard,
doesn’t mean he has the right to speak to me like I’m the scum suckling his
precious toes. Of all the things he could have called me, it had to be witch.
I pushed my hands together and laced outspoken words with
runic magic, gathering the spell inside my hand to a ball. When I felt the
prickling on my fingertips, I opened my hands and looked into the glowing orb.
Gregory was perched on a limb just inside the forest, about three big oak trees
away. His body crunched up like an owl, his head twisting around his body
looking for movement. If I find him first, I win. I crushed the ball in my hand.
I took my time moving around the broken tree limbs and
through parting oaks until my body slinked up to the tree he sat in. I looked
up, his head still rounding his body, waiting.
I whispered another spell. My heart hammered in my chest. I
prayed to Odin he didn’t see me. The familiar tingle spread across my middle
finger. I pointed it right at him and flicked and a light blue streak shot out
towards Gregory. Lightning flashed. He was gone.
44 comments:
Bye bye Gregory!!! Yay!! Loved the action here, thank you for sharing! Take care
x
He was gone? Was that a good or bad thing?
Very nice. I enjoyed the way wizards and witches play hide 'n' go seek.
ooh - love how she sneaks up on him in the end! Plus, love your simile "like the scum sucking his precious toes." Nice job!
Nice lighthearted action, liked it!
Thanks for sharing! I can really feel her her hatred towards Gregory.
Wow your entry's really good. Short yet exciting. Exactly what flas fiction should nbe. My entry's more contemporary.
Old kitty- Thank you.
Alex- I like reader interpretation :)
Thank you so much for your comments everyone! I appreciate them.
Great entry! I liked the action. :) Best of luck!
Oh that was so tense. Loved it, loved the image of him in the tree like an owl. Brilliant.
That was nicely written. Great detail and hide-and-seek fun. I hope Gregory got what was coming to him!
There's a nice sense of pace to it that fits with the action in this one.
awesome pace and tension! I liked the owl image and the crushing of the ball. Very cool! Great work, Summer~ :o) <3
I assume this is a fairy. Lesson learned. Don;t mess with fairies!
Great story, I've never thought of Witches and Wizards playing hide and seek before! That would be so much more fun with magic involved :)
ditto what Alex said; was he gone for good? or did he make himself gone?
Liked this :)
I loved this! Great action and magic, plus a cool heroine :)
Andrea
Great suspense building.
Ha! I enjoyed the story and the voice. And I love the line, "just because he’s a wizard, doesn’t mean he has the right to speak to me like I’m the scum suckling his precious toes".
I liked your combination of characters and thought it was funny that wizards are cheaters :)
I think Gregory learned the lesson, that it isn't nice to call people names, a little too late!
Unique concept, and fun. Great job!
Oh, I liked this! Loved the phrase about suckling his toes.
Loved your piece. Missed out on this blogfest!
Gregory seems to be a slippery bugger. Fun story! :)
I like her. I like her a lot. Gregory deserved it!
good for the witch! tense scene =)
Lots of action and suspense in just 300 words. I'm glad she won.
Great descriptions here!
Like how they're using magic.
Well done!
Love it Summer! Such great writing! Gregory should have been nicer. ;)
What a wonderful game of hide and seek. It could go so many different ways. Did she hit him, or did he escape?
Great descriptions!
Nice story. What have you got against Witches? :)
I'd like to read more of this story, it really drew me in. If you think of expanding it give me a nudge.
I'm thinking Gregory was never there to begin with. I'm thinking that our narrator better quick turn around or disappear fast. The game isn't over yet...
Intense! Great use of magic and fun :)
Allison (Geek Banter)
I have nothing constructive to say. Just that I liked it.
I enjoyed this. A lot of action and suspense. Poor Gregory, he never quite knew what was coming. Well done!
Yeah for magic! I like how you keep us guessing even at the end. Did she or didn't she get him? (: Great job!
Oh my goodness is he dead? :)
I'm chiming in on the admiration for the line, "...like I’m the scum suckling his precious toes." Loved, too, that she used her middle finger to do the wizard in! :-)
Some Dark Romantic
I know someone already said this, but there really was a lot of action contained within just 300 words! I do love the cliffhanger ending, as well. :-)
Fun concept with the hide-n-seek, but intense as well with the revenge theme thrown in!
Loved the description and imagery around the spell casting, made it more enticing
I love the bitterness of her character. Nice use of magic too :)
Yay! Loved the voice in this piece, and I liked how you revolved the story back to the “Lightning flashed.” Great job!
I'll announce the finalists tomorrow.
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