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8 creative sentences from Bloodstone-
The imp he may be, but Razzle did
not sense the rare bloodstone anywhere in the Jade Manor. Sire told him not to
leave without the precious stone, but he’d been in and out of bedchambers,
ballrooms, and all over the grounds for months and he had smelled nothing but
ghosts and humans. Irritation flooded his small body. It should have been easy
to sniff out. He kept himself invisible as he listened to the humans talk;
perhaps they had more information than he did. They were females and considered
beautiful, though Razzle had no idea why anyone found beauty in a human female.
Their skin held on too tight to their bodies and they had no tails. Razzle
shuddered; no tail was worse than missing arms or legs. It was unnatural.
22 comments:
I've often wondered what it would be like to have a tail... and what animals think of humans, so hairless, slow, and lacking many of their instincts and intuitions.
You've done a great job pulling me into this character's mind - great snippet :)
I like the glimpse into his inner thoughts
Yep you take us nicely deep into Razzle's thought process. Gives us a lot of info in one short excerpt. Nice job!
Love his name, too.
You do a great job describing how Razzle reacts to human behavior. What is Razzle exactly? This is my first time reading your snippets.
no tail was worse than missing arms or legs. It was unnatural. <-- I love it, lol. Excellent snippet. Looking forward to what you share next.
Well duh, gotta have a tail! Fun excerpt, I enjoyed the way the character thinks.
Wonderful insight to how another creature might view us!
The voice of this character is strong and interesting. Simpler than a human's, I would say, and that's what makes it realistic. His definition of beauty tells us as much about him as it does about the women. Great snippet!
When my granddaughter was small, my son had her convinced that she had been born with a tail and lost it. Weird humor?
Such a fun point of view:)
LOL the no tails part is hilarious! Love where this is going.
Ha! Excellent snippet! Very fun. :)
Very nice snippet!
Interesting to see what an imp thinks! It made me smile and giggle.
Would Razzle be annoyed if he knew I thought he sounded cute from that little snippet?
This was delightful! I love Razzle's definition of beauty, and I'm intrigued by his quest. :)
Donna
Poor Razzle, stuck there for months with the unnaturally tailless.
He'd better find some bloodstone soon!
So much fun! I love how he places ghosts and humans on the same level---why wouldn't he?---and has his own standards of beauty---again, of course!
He's a great character---wonder who his master is?
This is delightful Summer, and I thoroughly enjoyed Razzle's thoughts! Looking forward to future snippets!
I like Razzle. :) This was cool, his perspective of the human world.
History Sleuth's Milk Carton Murders
This is priceless! "...and they had no tails." Love it. What a well written snippet. :-)
I absolutely love this POV. You have a great voice!
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