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Its in chapter 4 of my WIP Beyond Words. Yes I have these things called Works in Progress that are not short stories. (Smiley face)
Okay so here is my two main characters Luke and Shray. They just got into a fight and have only been around each other for two days.
On with the no kissing!
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Shray sucked in a deep breath and jumped as the screen door slammed shut. She couldn't sit there and take it, no she'd done that for to long before, she wasn't going to let it happen this time. She didn't need a man in her life and after Luke's reaction, Shray was almost certain he knew how she could get home. Shray threw herself up from the couch and stomped out after Luke, she found him in the stall saddling Blaze.
“Luke, I'm in no mood for these games. I realize I'm only staying with you out of your good will. If you just helped me, even tried, I might get out of your busy lonely life a lot sooner,” Shray said. She was attempting to make the effort to be polite, but she wasn't sure it was working. He wasn't even looking at her.
Luke's shoulders hunched slightly and he turned to face her. He no longer looked angry. His eyes were sad and held something Shray was unsure of, an unfamiliar fire twinkled in their depths.
23 comments:
Oh, very good. This definitely grabs your attention and makes you wonder what were they fighting about, why is she there, etc. Thanks for sharing at look at Shray and Luke.
Mason
Thoughts in Progress
Yay for awkward misunderstandings leading to no-kiss moments! Also, i'm really pro a no-kiss moment in a barn stall. i don't know why, but that seems like a perfect setting
Ack! So close! Love the tension.
Well! Luke sure knows how to stun a girl! Fun snippet.
Oh!!! Man! That was harsh! And terrific !!!
Luke is such a tease!
Ouch, that was harsh. Great tension. Well done, Summer.
Michael
Ooh, so close! Terrific.
Oooh a near kiss that never happened!! Bad Luke!!! Poor Shray!!! What a great read, thank you!!
Thanks for sharing! Take care
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Well pooh, I hate it when that happens :) I just noticed your little comment prompt, is this making your wings flutter :D
Jules @ Trying To Get Over The Rainbow
NOT NICE, LUKE!
Great scene, though! I could totally feel with Shray.
Great tension! I was definitely wanting that kiss to happen :) Thanks for sharing!
Shray is an interesting name. I definitely feel for Luke, he sounds so cute!
Good job, I enjoyed this.
Wow. That is a great almost kiss. It was right there and written in a way that really showed it. Nicely done.
Well, YOWZA what an ending!!!!!! NICE!
argh! Kiss her! Kiss her!!! :D good stuff~ <3
Ohh what a 'no kiss' !
Love this blogfest, must start blogfesting soon :)
yours will be the first! Wooohoo!
Oooh how fun!! Thanks so much for participating:D
So near ... yet so far!
Nicely done Summer. Good luck with the rest of the WIP. Thanks for reading mine :D
:Dom
Ooh so close and then such a big let down fro Shray. I feel for her! :O0
Luke sure seems to know what he wants! Too bad he stopped-- I'm wondering what made him pull back.
O.o awesome. Short, to the point, and intense. Great read!
Darn Luke. That poor girl. :)Great job!
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