If I had to describe myself, it would be in a word that has many meanings with a complexity which falls off the tongue.
A word made up of many elements, is deceptive in appearance, and creates an illusion from the imagination.
My word would be Phantasmagoric. ~Summer Ross

Sunday, January 2, 2011

No kiss blogfest entry

This is my entry for the No Kiss Blogfest
read my entry then go check out the others.

Its in chapter 4 of my WIP Beyond Words. Yes I have these things called Works in Progress that are not short stories. (Smiley face)


 Okay so here is my two main characters Luke and Shray. They just got into a fight and have only been around each other for two days.

 On with the no kissing!


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Shray sucked in a deep breath and jumped as the screen door slammed shut. She couldn't sit there and take it, no she'd done that for to long before, she wasn't going to let it happen this time. She didn't need a man in her life and after Luke's reaction, Shray was almost certain he knew how she could get home. Shray threw herself up from the couch and stomped out after Luke, she found him in the stall saddling Blaze.

“Luke, I'm in no mood for these games. I realize I'm only staying with you out of your good will. If you just helped me, even tried, I might get out of your busy lonely life a lot sooner,” Shray said. She was attempting to make the effort to be polite, but she wasn't sure it was working. He wasn't even looking at her.

Luke's shoulders hunched slightly and he turned to face her. He no longer looked angry. His eyes were sad and held something Shray was unsure of, an unfamiliar fire twinkled in their depths.

“Who said I wanted you to go?” He took the step that stood between them and instantly had her face in his hands. Her pulse rocketing to an unthinkable level. Shray closed her eyes and tried to cower away. And then she felt his hot breath barely over her lips. Her heart stuttered in anticipation, then nothing. Shray opened her eyes, Luke let her go, huffed and walked away.

23 comments:

Mason Canyon said...

Oh, very good. This definitely grabs your attention and makes you wonder what were they fighting about, why is she there, etc. Thanks for sharing at look at Shray and Luke.

Mason
Thoughts in Progress

Sarah Ahiers (Falen) said...

Yay for awkward misunderstandings leading to no-kiss moments! Also, i'm really pro a no-kiss moment in a barn stall. i don't know why, but that seems like a perfect setting

Nicole said...

Ack! So close! Love the tension.

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Well! Luke sure knows how to stun a girl! Fun snippet.

The Words Crafter said...

Oh!!! Man! That was harsh! And terrific !!!

Missed Periods said...

Luke is such a tease!

gideon 86 said...

Ouch, that was harsh. Great tension. Well done, Summer.


Michael

Margo Benson said...

Ooh, so close! Terrific.

Old Kitty said...

Oooh a near kiss that never happened!! Bad Luke!!! Poor Shray!!! What a great read, thank you!!

Thanks for sharing! Take care
x

Jules said...

Well pooh, I hate it when that happens :) I just noticed your little comment prompt, is this making your wings flutter :D
Jules @ Trying To Get Over The Rainbow

Tessa Conte said...

NOT NICE, LUKE!

Great scene, though! I could totally feel with Shray.

Jessica Lei said...

Great tension! I was definitely wanting that kiss to happen :) Thanks for sharing!

Devin Bond said...

Shray is an interesting name. I definitely feel for Luke, he sounds so cute!

Good job, I enjoyed this.

Dawn Embers said...

Wow. That is a great almost kiss. It was right there and written in a way that really showed it. Nicely done.

Christina Lee said...

Well, YOWZA what an ending!!!!!! NICE!

LTM said...

argh! Kiss her! Kiss her!!! :D good stuff~ <3

Damyanti said...

Ohh what a 'no kiss' !

Love this blogfest, must start blogfesting soon :)

yours will be the first! Wooohoo!

Frankie Diane Mallis said...

Oooh how fun!! Thanks so much for participating:D

Dominic de Mattos said...

So near ... yet so far!

Nicely done Summer. Good luck with the rest of the WIP. Thanks for reading mine :D

:Dom

Madeleine said...

Ooh so close and then such a big let down fro Shray. I feel for her! :O0

Amalia T. said...

Luke sure seems to know what he wants! Too bad he stopped-- I'm wondering what made him pull back.

Loralie Hall said...

O.o awesome. Short, to the point, and intense. Great read!

Christine Danek said...

Darn Luke. That poor girl. :)Great job!

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