If I had to describe myself, it would be in a word that has many meanings with a complexity which falls off the tongue.
A word made up of many elements, is deceptive in appearance, and creates an illusion from the imagination.
My word would be Phantasmagoric. ~Summer Ross

Friday, January 28, 2011

No fear Blogfest entry

Dominic @ Writes of Passage is graciously hosting the No fear Blogfest today.

 Have I ever told you all how much I love blogfests? I really really LOVE them!

 Anywho- The rules:
"Post a passage in which your MC (or your favourite fictional character) shows their bravery. It might be in the face of physical danger, or peer pressure or personal sacrifice. It might be epic bravery or bravery that goes unnoticed by anyone but us, your devoted readers.

Here is my entry from my WIP Beyond Words: brief descript,  Shray and Luke have just traveled through a dictionary back to Shray's world were Jeffrey is waiting oh so impatiently...


“I'll go. I've been wanting to for a long time,” Luke replied. He sat beside her on the couch, brushing his arm against hers. Shray opened the dictionary attempting to concentrate on the pages as her skin seemed to come alive at the small touch. She grabbed Luke's hand before she lost the courage and found the word home. She ran her fingertips lightly over it and blinked. She found herself sitting in the middle of her living room, no couch. It was dark. She could here a slow breath come out, but it didn't belong to her. She looked around for Luke but couldn't see him.

“Finally...” a voice said drawing out the word.

Shray's heart stopped with that one word. She was not alone and it wasn't Luke's voice. Her blood iced over and her eyes frantically searched the room until she spotted movement on her right. Jeffrey sat at the computer. Shray didn't move a single muscle, she was frozen in place. Fear overwhelmed her body.

“I have been waiting so long for this moment.” Jeffrey's voice was laced with menace. Every word crawled over her skin promising cruelty. Shray didn't blink. She refused to take her eyes from him for even a second.

“I got out a few months ago. The first place I came was here. To my surprise there was no Shray. Did you think you could hide from me? What have you been up to my little whore?” His anger took over the whole room. Every single small breath Shray managed was laced with his cruel intentions and memories. Her mouth refused to open in answer. She was damned either way. Shray knew he wouldn't believe her, the words would come out and it would be nothing to him. Jeffrey would be livid if she didn't say exactly the right thing.

“Shray, I'm waiting for an answer,” Jeffrey snarled and brought himself right up to her face in one swift movement. Shray flinched, closing her eyes and instantly regret it. He wanted her fear, craved it. Every part of her wished this was a horrible nightmare. Tears stung at the corner of her eyes. She clutched the book finding a small form of comfort. She felt the change in the air and awaited the blow she knew would precede her actions.

She didn't have long to wait before his fist collided brutally with her left cheek. White hot pain burst from his welcoming and flooded her eye and jaw.

“I expect an answer,” Jeffrey said.

“I had...” tears sprang down her cheeks as she attempted words. Her whole body shook.

“You had what my dear?”

“Errands.” That was all she could muster as she chocked down her sobs and attempted to breath. She knew he enjoyed seeing her this way. She was below him, a mere woman.

“I see. What's this?” Jeffrey grabbed the book from Shray's hands and her eyes flew open. Pain rushed into her left eye and she felt the pressure of her swelling face.

“Williams dictionary. Wonderful darling. I knew I'd get it eventually. You see, it's the only reason I pretended to be with you for so long. I had to wait around for that piss-ant to die. My grandfather gave him this book. I may not posses his powers, but when I'm done with his greatest treasure it will all be mine.”

Shray stared at him. His grandfather gave William the book? He knew about it? Jeffrey’s eyes locked with hers.

“Don't you dare look at me that way! You kept this from me on purpose, you whore!” Jeffrey’s foot came up faster than Shray could react and collided with her chin. Blinding pain shot out all over her face. She felt her body fall back, her head met the wall. Then nothing, empty black space.

23 comments:

Jules said...

I know you are writing Shrays fear but I feel well, pissed. I would now like to have a whack at Jeffery. Great entry. :)
Jules @ Trying To Get Over The Rainbow

Roland D. Yeomans said...

Like Jules, I wanted my hero Victor to stroll in that room for just one whack at Jeffery. Or perhaps Alice. See? You've written so well of Shray that we feel as if she were real. Bravo, great job, Roland

Carolyn V. said...

Wow, Jeffrey is so bad. I hope he gets it in the end. Good job Summer!

Carol Kilgore said...

Traveled through the dictionary...now that's cool. Jeffery is evil.

Old Kitty said...

Oh no! Poor Shray!!! :-( That Jeffrey is one evil villain!! Booo to him!!

Great stuff, thanks for sharing - I loved it!! And I hope Shray is ok! Take care
x

Angela Felsted said...

Poor Shray! And just a couple little things, go back and spell check this page. Choke doesn't have a c before the k, and watch your homonyms. Hear and here have different meanings.

Great emotional intensity, though. I really felt for your MC.

Kittie Howard said...

Way to go, Summer! Jeffrey deserves whatever he gets!!

The Golden Eagle said...

I hope Jeffrey gets it!

Great blogfest post!

Madeleine said...

Now that's one horrible bully! I hope Shray gets the upperhand soon.:O)

Raquel Byrnes said...

That guy is terrible! I love the names you chose; memorable and evocative of your genre. I feel so bad for her.
Edge of Your Seat Romance

N. R. Williams said...

Well done. I love the idea of the dictionary being a portal. Cool!
Nancy
N. R. Williams, fantasy author

gideon 86 said...

Great premise with the dictionary... Loved it!

Hey Summer, Jeffrey and my mc character should get together. They're both cut from the same cloth.

Michael

Elaine AM Smith said...

Hi Summer
I loved this line: She clutched the book finding a small form of comfort. WOW!Your Jeffrey is bad. I have to hope someone workout how to deal with him. I love the dictionary/portal idea. :)

Dominic de Mattos said...

This is great stuff Summer. You write a first class villain! But what happened to Luke?! I kept thinking any moment he is going to step out of the shadows and come to Shray's aid!

Well done!

:Dom

Jemi Fraser said...

Yikes! My heart's pounding. Hope Shray gets out.

Francine Howarth said...

Hi,

Oh nasty piece of male sh*t is that Jeffrey. I hope Shray sees him get his comeuppance! ;)

Great scene setting, Summer, and if I'd been there Jeffers would have been minus a couple of important parts! I saw a movie once in which a woman shot a man's tackle! :o

best
F

Tessa Conte said...

Oh Noes! Poor Shray!

Bad Bad Jeffrey.

I love the idea of a 'dictionary' being so important! Makes me real curious as to what it really is...

T.x

Margo Benson said...

Here's hoping the horrid Jeffrey gets his comeuppance! A gripping piece.

Ellie said...

Ooo...he is nasty! Poor Shray! And you ended it with a cliffhanger...no. I want to read more!

No Fear Blogfest

Myne Whitman said...

Nicely done, I identified with the MC and was cheering him on.

Tony Benson said...

I like the dictionary concept. I don't like Jeffrey, though. A very engaging story.

Elaine AM Smith said...

That Jeffrey is bad news. Shray shows great bravery standing up to him. I love the idea of the dictionary portal. Well written, Summer!

L'Aussie said...

Hey Summer. Neat piece! I don't like Jeffrey but he makes a great foil for Shray's bravery. I think we all vote for more!

Denise :)

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