I'm posting on a Monday for a special treat to myself- A blogfest entry for Jolene's Lovin Language Blogfest
The rules:
"Pick any five lines (yes, it can be a few short lines that roll together. That's okay, and is probably what I'll do) from one of your WIPs. If you're feeling shy, and don't want to share from your own work, share from something you LOVE."
This is from my flash fiction piece to be published in 2012 called "The Game"
The rules:
"Pick any five lines (yes, it can be a few short lines that roll together. That's okay, and is probably what I'll do) from one of your WIPs. If you're feeling shy, and don't want to share from your own work, share from something you LOVE."
This is from my flash fiction piece to be published in 2012 called "The Game"
"There to the right I saw the bill of the hat lying on the ground. Carefully and swiftly, I made my way to the area. The wind noticed and a gust flew in. The hat tipped upright and moved away with each step I took closer. If I didn’t know any better I’d think the wind was on his side"
29 comments:
Love it!
A very lovely five lines. I particularly like the last one.
Nice lines. The wind on some guys side, huh?
Nice! I love that the wind is alive! Yay!! Well done you! take care
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Tense!
Very visual. I can imagine the wind purposely flinging the hat away from you.
Cute! Pesky wind...I love using personification.
Awesome piece of writing, Summer. I can see why you love it.
Ellie Garratt
Nice job. I love it when people give motivations to the weather - we've ALL felt that way :D
Cute! I love it! :D
Personifying the wind. I like that. Great imagery.
Lucy
Cute! I'm picturing the hat skidding away.
The Write Soil
Ooh! I want to know who 'he 'is!
Very nice! Thanks for sharing.
"If I didn't know any better, I'd think the wind was on his side" LOVE IT!!
LOL. Nice work :)
Oh yeah, that's happened to me before. The wind totally plays with people. Good job at bringing back memories!
Love it, love it. :)
I sympathize with your character. I've totally had that happen to me before. Nice job personifying the wind.
Very cool, Summer! Anyone who can write flash fiction gets bonus admiration from me, so kudos.
I really like that last line :) And it's stormy and windy today so I can relate to this...hehe
Great job!! Love the last line. :)
I love personifying things that don't have a personality as such. Beautiful imagery here.
Very nice! In five sentences, you made even the wind into an active character.
Okay, I just love your writing. You never disappoint. I could totally picture the entire scene in five sentences. Excellent! :D
Ooh... that has me very curious. :-)
I love the last line!
What a few lines! And the wind is on no one's side, it just has a great sense of humor. :)
Hope all is well my fairy friend, twinkle dust!!!
Jules @ Trying To Get Over The Rainbow
hehe cute little micro fiction. Loved it.
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