"Storytelling reveals meaning without committing the error of defining it." ~Hannah Arendt
Many wanted to know the location of Yesterdays picture its a picture I took on my way into Utah of the Flaming Gorge. Such a pretty place.
Here is my entry for the Guess that character blogfest from Jen. Its not actually a snippet in the story, but rather an outside interaction I came up with for the blogfest. Enjoy and please tell me what you believe my character Andaya looks like, I'm very interested in these responses, what a fun thing to do!
"Mother, please, just tell me about the city."
"Andy, I can't. Look just take the pills and it will go away."
"No!" Andaya threw the sleeping pills at the wall behind her mother. She didn't understand. The souls didn't just fill her dreams. Their pain was Andaya's pain. She was trapped in this house like the souls trapped inside the city.
"Andy, stop this now! Your grandmother spent her life looking for a myth. She was crazy and I don't want you to end up like her." Salina stepped back from the bed.
"Get out!" Andaya pulled the blankets up to her chin and turned her back on her mother. Her bedroom door clicked shut.
In the darkness her body tingled as if spiders crawled down her skin. A shiver raked its finger up her spine and Andaya knew they were waiting. She clenched her eyes shut as the souls tugged at her thoughts. She couldn't breath. Her chest heaved with no avail to air. Andaya succumbed to them
"Help us..." the voices said in unison.
44 comments:
I see Andaya to be a 20-something girl, short hair with emerald green eyes, that has the outward appearance of life-worn yet beautiful.
Great character. :D
Jules
Trying To Get Over The Rainbow
This isn't a snippet? Well it needs to be-- NICE!!! I say she has flaming red hair and green eyes!
I'm thinking young teen, Mexican desent.
I saw someone about 13 years old, because she wants to understand, but not wanting to take her mother's word for it. Brown hair, just past the shoulders. I also saw her in a long flannel "nightie."
Hi,
Lovely piece of writing.
So now the guessing begins: Her skin like alabaster, lips pale pink, large eyes dark (black beads), shoulder length hair (black) and fine with feathered fringe, she's dainty slim, barely a teen, borne of wild imaginings and fanciful tastes in clothes; soft pretty colours, glitter trimmings and sparkly beads.
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Beautiful piece of writing!!!
She sounds beautiful! So here goes nothing...
My Guess: Long sleek black hair, down to the low of her back, porcelain perfect skin, bright green eyes that pop out of her beautiful oval shaped face. She's petite yet very strong and those around her know it. I think she is covered with sparkles and glitter, very kind pastel colors for clothing.
I look forward to a picture tomorrow!
Short, choppy dark hair, light eyes that look large in a gamine face. Pale face, probably dark circles under her eyes.
I can't wait to find out for real!
THis is awesome! Just beautiful, and I'm very intrigued about your story :)
i say she has dark brown hair and blue eyes, I think she keeps her hair long but is always brushing it out of her eyes. I also think she smiles rarely, but when she does it's beautiful :)
i picture a pixie like young girl... ummm sort of looks like Mila Kunis (but twelve or so) in my mind.
Andaya has long, chestnut brown hair, rather straight. She lets it hang in front of her eyes a lot, preferring to keep her eyes and thoughts hidden. Her eyes are a strange color, rather pale, and everyone who sees them knows she's one of *them* -- one of the ones who can sense the souls in the city. Naturally, she doesn't want people to know this, and because she keeps herself apart, people think she's rather odd.
I may have gotten swept up in the story idea there a bit ... don't know where that all came from. :D
Ooh, I liked this piece. Andaya strikes me as a prophetess type, so I'm guessing long, striaght black hair, medium height but very slim, stunning green eyes, porcelain pale skin.
wow miss summer this is kinda scary. i think andaya is maybe 16 years old and not gonna listen to her mom and mom knows it. shes got long honey color hair that pretty much is over her face and shes got greenish eyes.
...smiles from lenny
Exotic in looks with wide eyes. She is thin but strong and very driven and a doer of good no matter the cost. She is a alpha to her mothers beta and very stubborn.
Wow! Very dramatic!
Hmm. I'm going to say she's quite strong looking, with strong features. Not exactly pretty, but striking. Dark skin and eyes.
Wooooow creepy! So like most of the times, when I see a creepy story I imagine a girl with dark hairs, buuut this one striked me as a blond.
Certaintly tormented look, thin small nose.
I'm guessing she's about 12 or 13, and I envision a haunted face, with dark circles under her eyes, very fair skin, pale blonde hair maybe with a streak of color in it. Very curious about these souls that inhabit her.
ps. I love that Joyce Kilmer quote about the fairy poet!!!!
I think she's a young teen with straight chestnut hair and round brown eyes with a lot depth to them that reflect fear and compassion. She's of Hispanic descent and she's thin because she can't eat. Has dark circles under her eyes because she can't sleep. She's an introvert.
Okay, great excerpt and hopefully I got something right. :D
Andy is fairly young, probably no older than 15. She's petite with gray or silver eyes and long silvery blond hair. Ethereal-looking. She's probably pale and has dark circles under her eyes from lack of sleep. She walks with her shoulders a little hunched, like she has the world on her shoulders.
Interesting bit about the souls and the city!
I think she's in her early teens. Olive skin, slightly overweight, with dark hair and big dark eyes.
Thin, small boned and frail. Lanky brown hair, almost black eyes. I'm going with the dark circles under her eyes too. A haunted look, because, well, she is:)
Great scene!
ooh - creepy. I'm imagining dark shoulder length hair. Waifish and pale. Amber eyes framed by black eyelashes.
I'm no good at these things, I know, but I'll give it a shot anyway: Andaya is a petite girl of average build with dark eyes and equally dark hair. Her skin is maybe just a little too pale.
I see Andaya as a young lady, maybe in her early to mid-twenties, she has gorgeous curly hair, very long and dark brown, lovely green eyes and pale complexion, possibly a few freckles. A strong personality and has no problem telling her mother where to step off. (in the nicest way) ;))
Thanks so much for commenting on my entry too, and for the follow! ;))
I see her as physically weak but intellectually strong. She's blonde, and even her long hair looks weak, like it will snap if brushed too hard. She's got enormous, "Precious Moments" eyes the color of milk chocolate. Her willowy body is neither short not tall, though her limbs appear long and spindly. She's just a teenager.
Ooh, can't wait for tomorrow's reveal!
She sounds young....maybe 15-16, just by the way her mother is treating her. I see dark auburnish hair, round face...Abigail Breslin in Zombieland.
Great excerpt!! Love the end!
Nice scene!
I'm picturing a totally gypsy-type look - olive skin, penetrating black eyes, tumbles of black curls, lithe body.
Although I don't personally like this actress, I can see Kristen Stewart (Twilight) in this role. Dark, moody, intense eyes!
I see long straight black hair, green eyes... if she's supposed to be taking sleeping pills, she probably looks tired, perhaps thin.
Wow, loved the writing here.
I see her as tall, with a slender frame. It's her eyes that stand out for me. Intelligent, dark eyes with long lashes.
Uh, creepy. I don't think I can sleep now. lol
She's tall and slender, almost looks breakable. With short hair so she doesn't have to deal with it. And eyes that shimmer in a strange way.
Ooh! Creepy!
I'm picturing Andaya with olive toned skin and short, black hair. Gray eyes and slender.
Wow--I really want to know what's going on in this world! I picture a girl around sixteen with long, unruly black curls. She's got dark brown eyes and freckles, and a heart-shaped face. Can't wait for the reveal!
My probation officer said its best to not share the thoughts in my head - so, I will just say I enjoyed it.
Mr Monkey
Very nice scene. I'm picturing pale blue eyes, long wavy blonde hair and very petite.
Oooh...scary! I think she has long auburn hair, green eyes, and freckles. She's short and has generous curves. Can't wait to see the reveal tomorrow!
I see a girl with hair that is very hard to tame so it is kind of in a mess all the time. She is kind of small and pixie-like. She's cute in her own way that is in general different from other people. She's her own person. Fun excerpt!
A petite pixie girl, long straight brown hair, not much older than 14. Dark eyes. This character deserves to be developed into a story!
She's youngish. Just starting to understand this thing that makes her different, but not old enough to control it. I see dark hair, almost black. It's silky and shines. It sways down her back. Big brown eyes. Very dark, can hardly see the pupils. At times they're innocent and other times when other souls influence her they show an age and wisdom beyond her.
I picture a young Winona Rider when she had shorty wispy hair. Pale like her with porcelain skin and big expressive eyes.
Nice job! I picture a pale, frail girl with black hair in a pixie cut. Dark eyes with dark circles under them.
Very interesting.
Strong and wispy. She has the appearance of being frail, but she has a strong will. Her pale skin and sunken in eyes make her look like she could die at any moment. She has been through many fights before and come out on top. This time will be no different.
Summer, this is a great read! Whoa, I want more, girl!
I'm thinking that she's about 17 or 18. She has long golden brown hair, creamy complexion, blue eyes and a beautiful chiseled face. She's willowy but has dark bruises under her eyes from lack of sleep--her body dangerously thin from the soul searchers. ;)
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