If I had to describe myself, it would be in a word that has many meanings with a complexity which falls off the tongue.
A word made up of many elements, is deceptive in appearance, and creates an illusion from the imagination.
My word would be Phantasmagoric. ~Summer Ross

Sunday, March 10, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors 3/10

 8 sentences from my novel Bloodstone
~Her breath caught and instinctively she tried to pull herself free. Like a rabbit caught in a trap, the more she struggled the harder her father held on. His anger only increased by her defiance. He bit his bottom lip and brought the knife up.
           Ebony broke out in a sweat as she realized her father intended to chop the ring off her finger. Her heart hammered in her chest as she struggled harder, trying to grab the counter or anything to give her leverage. Ebony's hand slid free and she fell back on the white tiled floor. She looked up at her father. ~
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28 comments:

jessielansdel said...

Oh my word. Will he succeed with this I wonder. How ghastly. Great suspense filled snippet 😳

Sara Barnard said...

Uh oh, something tells me Dad doesn't like his new son-in-law ... great eight!

charmainegordon author said...

OMG! Serious trouble going on here. Scary. You've captured the scene so graphic, I shivered reading it.

Daezarkian13 said...

Nice suspense and detail!

Jenny said...

Oh my... How is she going to get out of this, I wonder? I'm sitting on the edge of my seat, biting my fingernails and crying over having to wait a whole week to see what happens next.

Maggie said...

Oh wow! That's an intense eight. Great work!

ellaquinnauthor said...

Great 8. I tweeted.

The Belle in Blue said...

Very intense snippet! Definitely got me wondering what's going to happen next. Hope you continue with this next Sunday!

~Joyce Scarbrough

India Masters said...

Oh my stars! What kind of father tries to chop off his daughters finger? Totally freaked me out! Wasn't expecting that at all. Very, very nice, m'dear.

Ute Carbone said...

I love the intensity of this snippet. Not father of year, is he?

karen Y. bynum said...

Whoa! That was intense! Great 8!!

Veronica Scott said...

Wow, this is quite a scene we've walked into, very intense. I hope she can get away unscathed. Excellent excerpt!

Evelyn Jules said...

Wow, do you ever know how to hook a girl. Fabulous eight! I'll be back for more! :)

Ann Swann said...

Oh, wow. Great writing! Can't wait to find out what happens...

Debbie Doglady said...

Well, I'm hooked! What an intense reaction from her father! Looking forward to the next instalment.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Very intense. Her father is super ticked off.

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Great intensity and nastiness here. Daddy's not very reasonable, I see. (Love the rabbit in a trap simile, FYI. Creates a great visual association.)

Kate said...

What a nasty guy! Makes me appreciate my Dad more, that's for sure.

You've used the word "caught" in two successive sentences. Might want to change one of them, or just delete the second one.

Very tense eight. Well done!

Elise Fallson said...

Wow! What an intense scene and a great tease. :)

Ryan Derham said...

Tense and emitional snippet. I hope her father controls his anger before it's too late.

meryvamp said...

Chop off her finger? Ugh, what a nasty father. I wonder how she'll fight back. Great snippet!

gzidar said...

Wow... that was intense. Well done and thanks for sharing. Hopefully she gets through this in one piece.

Claire Gillian said...

Whoa, daddy's angry. Did she fall back because he got the ring or because he rethought his anger and let go? I hope the latter.

Siobhan Muir said...

Oh, good, she got free, but I don't think that's the end of it. Intense snippet, Summer. :)

A. J. Bradley said...

Omg, amazing 8! So much panic, very intense. I hope you'll put up more next week, please!!

gemma parkes said...

Ooh, tense! I loved the pace and the way it had me holding my breath!

Frank C. Etier said...

Hmm...makes you wonder if he's got more in mind than cutting her finger off.
Nice 8!

sarahballance said...

WOW. Powerful excerpt!

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