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8 sentences from my novel Bloodstone
Continuing from last week which you can find here- all feedback welcome.
Ebony held no hope that she still lived, even in a magical world. The image felt more of the past than the future or the present. An impression.
Most of the time Ebony wasn’t even sure she really experienced magic. But there had always been this itching over her skin when it happened, like a residual coming and going of energy. She’d expressed it to her father once, long ago, and he told her she had been imagining things and sent her away. Deep inside, Ebony knew magic had existed once. Maybe not the kind of magic she read about in fairy tales with wands and potions and evil witches. But rather something that came from inside a person, lost somewhere in the depths of their souls.
34 comments:
I like what you have done with magic - a wave of physical and psychological recognition. Thanks for sharing. I'm going to enjoy reading where you have this story take us.
Very nice #8Sentence. Really like the new edits/changes. Definitely intriguing. Would have thought her father would have been a bit harsher with her (from previous versions). Very nice - and definitely intriguing.
Methinks her father protests too much!
Interesting snippet---her doubts are realistic for her age, but I like that she's clinging to her beliefs, too.
Lovely. Your imagination amazes me. I'm so practical. Thanks for a stunning eight.
I think this is very nice, Summer! This story sounds very intriguing to me and I'm interested to learn more. Nice peek inside the story. Great depth here.
Oooo. Very intriguing snippet.
Hi, Summer! I love that phrase "this itching over her skin". This is an intriguing 8.
I like the itching skin analogy! Interesting story.
I've always liked stories about whether or not magic is real and if someone has special talents. Great snippet!
Intriguing. I look forward to learning more about this magic.
Fel Wetzig, The Peasants Revolt
Nice eight, Summer! I love the notion that magic comes from inside and not outside of the character.
Intriguing. She's not sure if she's alive? Curious to see where this goes.
I like her definition of magic and also that she didn't let her father's disbelief affect her. Terrific snippet!
This is fantastic. I love the "itching sensation" and the idea that magic exists inside a person...
Beautiful as always and absolutely true!
Awesome eight, as usual! Cool use of magic, too!
Love the way you describe magic. Makes it real.
Interesting post. I love her definition of magic. I look forward to more.
Hey, thanks for stopping by my blog and letting me know about the Creighton Manor link. :) I'll have to stop by your blog for the A to Z challenge posts, too. :) Have a wonderful Sunday!!
Great depth in this piece. It's intriguing and atmospheric. Well done! New follower. x
Love the last line. And I get the feeling Ebony will know a lot more magic before the tale is told. :)
Love this fresh take on magic! Really makes me want to find out more. Great snippet!
~Joyce Scarbrough
Liked the way you connected magic with soul. And her been not sure whether she's alive or not. Interesting. :)
Intriguing. I believe in that inner magic. It is what makes us creative...
This is really beautiful. Very well written. I love the emotion in it.
Awesome! Internal magic. That last line is the best. Your pacing is very lyrical.
Awesome 8. I really enjoyed this excerpt.
I love this train of thought. Fab 8. :)
You do such a great job of making me feel the world with the magic and how you describe it. It pulls me right in!
This is actually a really nice excerpt. It works well and quickly takes us into perspective on the world and how Ebony's magic might work or not work. I enjoyed it!
Loved the post and the description of magic.
Interesting snippet. Thanks for sharing! :)
Oooh, makes me eager to read more! :)
Parents... They always ruin everything o.O
Great post, Summer. Looking forward to more :)
I like her/your take on magic; there are so many directions you can go with this.
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