If I had to describe myself, it would be in a word that has many meanings with a complexity which falls off the tongue.
A word made up of many elements, is deceptive in appearance, and creates an illusion from the imagination.
My word would be Phantasmagoric. ~Summer Ross

Sunday, April 14, 2013

'It wasn't the first time...' WWW- 4-14-13

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8 sentences from my novel- Bloodstone 

So I rewrote chapter one of my novel last week. Here is the beginning- what do you think?



    It wasn’t the first time something magical had happened to Ebony. Usually it was a result of her studying runes or thinking about her mother. This time, however, was different. This time she’d found something.
     Typically, the magic hovered on the outskirts of reality, an image of another time and place. Dreams of her mother in silk dresses dancing at balls with her father and a few other men. Her obsidian hair, just as long and feathered as Ebony’s, flowing about her as she turned with notes from a violin. But her mother had long since passed away.

25 comments:

J.Rose Allister said...

I love the opening line. "It wasn't the first time something magical had happened to Ebony." Very hook-y!

gemma parkes said...

Absolutely beautiful, almost poetic, l loved it!

charmainegordon author said...

Haunting and touching. What are runes? Interesting eight.

Veronica Scott said...

Ooh, intriguing. I loved the description of the magic. Excellent excerpt!

India Masters said...

Oh, I do love stories filled with magic and love the description about how it hovers just outside reality. Very nice 8!

T C Mckee said...

Nice! Great opening lines.

Debbie Doglady said...

Wonderfully descriptive passage. Love the "obsidian hair".

Evelyn Jules said...

This is a really strong opening, Summer! Beautifully written! :)

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Intriguing and beautiful opening, Summer. :D

Lauren said...

OMG, I love how you describe this. It's so visual and haunting. It sucked me write in! I'm following you back Summer!

Elaine Smith said...

Excellent excerpt. I loved the description about how magic hovers just outside reality. Evocative.

Elaine Cantrell said...

The opening line is super.

The Belle in Blue said...

Great opening! It teases with the promise of magic but also grounds the reader with realism. I'd definitely keep reading!

~Joyce Scarbrough

Dana Renelt said...

I love it! So fluid, so imaginative. Great work!

Ute Carbone said...

This has a lovely, almost haunted feel to it, Summer.Nice work!

Linda Morris said...

Intriguing and evocative opening. Love it!

Clare Davidson said...

The opening line has a great hook. The rest made me curious about both the magic and Ebony's mother, especially with the last line.

Vivien Dean said...

I'm joining the consensus. That opening line is a terrific hook into the rest of it. Well done!

S. J. Maylee said...

You pulled me right into the story and left me wanting more.

Owllady said...

I really like the ending-raises so many questions. It seems like you have a strong feel for this character's personality and that goes a long way toward making them believable. :)

Stephanie Burkhart said...

Very intriguing Summer. I'm curious as to what happened THIS time around.

Smiles
Steph

Elyzabeth M. VaLey said...

That was a beautiful snippet, Summer! It raises a lot of questions in its limited space about magic, Ebony's mother and Ebony herself.

ED Martin said...

I agree, good opening line.

Sharon Buchbinder said...

Love the description of her skin itching when she feels magic. You got under MY skin with that! :)

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